Once friendship and love stood at odds
fighting about who is more important in ones life
Love said obviously its me
and friendship simply smiled
Impulsive as love is, it said
Its not by chance that most stories are written on me
and most movies are made on me
that I am the one who makes people want to live..
and that some will even kill and die for me….
Yes..that is very true..said friendship…
that you have killed quite a few
but when you leave somebody so devastated
I’m the one who takes care of the ill-fated
and for every person that you tried to kill
I’m the one who put some life back into him..
I’m the one who shoulders…friendship then said…
when you should have been there…
And yet Im the one who is the most forgotten..
Coz now suddenly you decided to “be there”
You celebrate anniversaries…
Of the promise you decided to make on a day
But I’m the one who keeps my word
Without bothering of Work, Distances or whatever ahead may lay…
2 people can stay in love
only as long as they get along
but if you really want to stay together
its the friendship that will take you long.
After a lot of contemplation (which it always does!)
love just had to agree
That for it to last a lifetime..
friendship there had to be!
Cheers to friendship! 🙂
Abha Deshkar
20/11/2010
9 comments
wate.. Mast hai abzy.. Often heartbrkz do tk a toll on u,itz frndshp dat cumz 2 d rescue 2 wipe d weeping heart..seen thru it,been thru it..
cheers to friendship!!! my 2nd favourite after “why mothers worry… fathers shake hands…..and we seem indifferent…”……it just gets better AD!
@ dipz : Thats what friends are for dips!..am glad u could relate to it. 🙂
@ deepika : A BIG thanks for reading our blog so consistently… Its because of your words of praise and encouragement..that we feel like writing….
am glad its your second fav.. 🙂 🙂
good 1 miss abha… sometimes difficult 2 incorporate coz frndship is like a silent admirer & love cn b in ur face.. may nt b true always bt is more often den not.. good poem none the less
The ideas and thoughts expressed through this poem are very true, one can relate to them. The poem itself is very nicely written….
Just a couple of suggestions that popped into my head when reading this –
1) You’ve written :
I’m the one who shoulders…friendship then said…
when you should have been there…
You can make it rhyme without changing the meaning –
Friendship said, “On my shoulders the burden I bear ,
When you should have been there.”
2) if u make a slight rearrangement in some of the sentences, it will read even better
e.g.
Yes, said friendship, that is very true
That you have killed quite a few
AND
Love said, it’s me, obviously
Do keep writing 🙂
hey sharan!
thanks for the suggestions…
sometimes it so happens that you are in the mode.. and the rhyming does not exactly fit in…
did think of the 2nd suggestion of yours while writing..but i tried to rhyme the feeling of friendship…and friendship- the word, did not figur in that.. 😉
do keep reading! 🙂 🙂
Nice one abha…though it was crisp and simple…it explains the true fact in minute detail…read all ur posts…u r super-duper talented…keep writing…keep up d gd work… 🙂 🙂 🙂 and thanx pranjal 🙂 🙂 🙂
thanks star! its kind words like these that keeps us going!
do keep reading! 🙂
@Star
Thanks for mE? Why? 😛